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Part 8 - Zero
“Kiss me, please kiss me - but kiss me out of desire, babe, and not consolation...” Jeff Buckley, Last Goodbye
My awareness returned only enough to allow me to notice her eyes locked on mine. The world stuttered and stopped. There was no roar of the ocean, there was no drawing of breath. I could not move and I could not think. I could only gaze in wonder and hope.
Finally, she released me from my prison.
"I..." She said, dragging the word out and across the ground. "I love you, too." She extended her head upward, kissing me softly on my chapped lips.
I noticed that it had stopped snowing.
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Posted on Saturday, June 26 2004
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Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by sexcpotatoes (SpiderJerusalem@TheHOLE.com) on Saturday, June 26 2004
(User Info | Send a Message | Journal) http://www.sexcpotatoes.com | | Hey, it's cool how the segments got shorter and shorter towards zero, not that anyone coming here for their literary fix would mind if you pulled a hemingway and rambled aimlessly for 10 pages. Keep 'em comin' Joe. |
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Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by homncruse on Saturday, June 26 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://yaganet.org | Quote from Alcoholic Butterfly in -5 Seconds:
That was better.
but what could happen in 5 seconds?
That. Joe went to prison, then got out... all in 5 seconds.
I hope that the stories get progressively longer now, just as they became shorter and shorter as we approached Ground Zero! |
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Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by silkyjohnson on Saturday, June 26 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) | | Joe, you just made my nuts drop another inch with your craziness. Keep it up, and for crying out loud make the stories longer. |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by Kaji on Saturday, June 26 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) | It makes sense, only so much can happen in ten minutes.
(5 seconds later Joe gets hit in the head with a random seagull, 5 years later, Joe wakes up from a coma....) |
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Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by Hamachi on Saturday, June 26 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://www.girlz0r.org | Mmm... Jeff Buckley.
I've loved everything thus far.This story, in particular, really echoes the terrifying-whirlwind-John Hughes-esque magic those first few months after Mark and I finally met face to face. The nervousness, the amazement that, finally, there's someone who really gets it. When I read these stories, I've found myself grinning and nodding.
While the stories have gotten shorter, it really does reflect how the brain reacts when you have completely and utterly fallen for someone. Fragments. Scents. Sounds. Polaroids of moments that won't matter in 100 years but matter right now.
This is such a wonderful story, Joe. I can't wait to read the next installments.
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Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by the_joker11 on Monday, June 28 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) | And indeed, this being Joe, a lot of bad things (at least physically very hurting things) are bound to happen :)
But anyway, he already revealed that there will be a change of pace or tone later on....we've got something coming....
Great work, as always Joe! |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by Krillian_Hex (khex at nyc dot rr dot com) on Tuesday, June 29 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://www.krillianhex.com | | I sure wish the stories would come faster. I mean, theres only so long you can hold a climax and suspense. I can't even do that during sex. ;) |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by Reflections on Tuesday, June 29 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) | | I sure wish people would hold back on certain parts of their life. I mean, there's only so much you should know about someone. |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by homncruse on Tuesday, June 29 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://yaganet.org | Let's get some stories on your rough weekends too then!
1 a day for the past 4 days... does that mean we wait 4 more weeks for the next part? ;) |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by sizarah on Wednesday, June 30 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://www.myspace.com/sidah | | take your time joe. :D waiting makes it that much better when it gets here. plus, you have a life other than this website. as tyler would put it, "you gotta watch out for number one" |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by homncruse on Wednesday, June 30 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) http://yaganet.org | He does not have a life outside this website! :P
He went to see Spiderman 2. He told me before he left, and since he was talking to me, he probably forgot to update first :P |
Re: Romance.Net | Part 8 | Zero (Score: 1)
by Slade on Thursday, July 08 2004
(User Info | Send a Message) | | Really? How was Spider Man 2? I want to go see it. |
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